Category: Teens

How can you get your teens to read?

Hey everyone!

So I was featured in an article that was published everywhere. I talked about teen literacy, and how happy I am that teens in Canada were ranked pretty high compared to other countries. The article is below along with all the places it’s appeared so far.

I don’t know whether to be shocked or to squee or what. I’m always rather informal on my blog so being considered an advocate for teen literacy makes me feel a little nauseous. I think teens should be reading, but that’s because there’s awesome stuff in books that you can’t go to a movie or a mall for. (Well except for the Hunger Games.)

Anyway, hope everyone is having a great Friday! I’m editing . . . which is excruciating.

Namaste,
Rhi

To Ensure a Bright Future,
Your Teen Needs to be Reading
Author Offers Tips for Getting Adolescents to Turn the Page

Being able to read well is more important than ever for young adults to achieve economic success. But more than 60 percent of middle and high school students score below “proficient” in reading achievement, according to a December 2011 report by the Alliance for Excellent Education.

“Teen literacy is a huge problem in the United States – its 15-year-olds rank 14th among developed nations in reading – behind Poland, Estonia and Iceland,” says Rhiannon Paille, 27, an advocate for teen literacy whose new fantasy novel, “Flame of Surrender” (yafantasyauthor.com) targets young adults. (South Korea, Finland and Canada rank 1st, 2nd 0020and 3rd.)

“Kids need strong reading skills if they hope to graduate from high school AND they really need to plan for college – 59 percent of U.S. jobs today require some postsecondary education, compared to 28 percent in 1973.”

The best thing parents can do to help boost their 12- to 18-year-olds’ literacy is to get them reading – anything.

She offers these suggestions:

• Buy them comic books. Boys persistently lag behind girls in reading, according to the National Center for Education Statistics, Paille says. If your son isn’t a reader, try getting him hooked on comic books. “Stephen King started off reading comics, ‘Tales from the Crypt.’ Hey, if it was good enough for him …!’’ From comic books, they may move into graphic novels, a popular young adult genre. As long as they’re reading, they’re building comprehension skills and vocabulary, so it needn’t be “War and Peace.”

• Look for book-to-film novels. Chances are, if it was a great movie, they saw it, and that’s often enough to get a non-reader curious. This is another especially good hook for boys, Paille says.

• Tune into what they’re interested in. What kinds of video games do they play? Some popular games have spawned novels, including Halo, EverQuest, ElfQuest and Gears of War. Even gaming guides, which players read to unlock new clues to advancing in the game, can motivate a teen to crack a book.

• Read the same book your teen is reading. Book clubs are popular because people like talking to others who’ve read the same book. Your teen may not be ready for an evening of petit fours and grape juice while discussing the pacing of “Hunger Games,” but it can make for some interesting conversation on the way to soccer practice. And you can always nudge them along with comments like, “Oh, you haven’t gotten to that part yet? It’s really good!”

“People tend to think their young adults aren’t reading if they’re not reading novels,” Paille says. “But novels aren’t for everyone, and whether it’s a comic book or a gaming guide, all reading helps build comprehension skills and vocabulary.”

Good magazines, with shorter articles suited for distractible adolescents, might include Sports Illustrated, People, Seventeen or Mad.

“When you’re out shopping, think about what they’re interested in and pick up something just for them. Sometimes, it’s as simple as putting the right reading materials right into their hands.”

About Rhiannon Paille:
Rhiannon Paille is an active advocate for youth literacy and an avid reader of young adult novels. Her first book, the non-fiction “Integrated Intuition: A Comprehensive Guide to Psychic Development,” remains a popular seller on amazon.com. Paille is the founder of the Canadian Metaphysical Foundation. She’s married and the mother of two children.

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#TopTenTuesday 10 things I don’t hate about Justin Bieber

I think I’m a true belieber.

And so here are 10 things I don’t hate about Justin Bieber.

#10 – His Dad is from Winnipeg. Like any true Winnipegger, anyone that has any connection to my hometown is good in my books.

#9 – He’s a kid with a ton of attention. That could go wrong, but from what I’ve heard on the radio, he keeps in regular contact with his friends and stays grounded.

#8 – Usher. I really don’t need to say more, I’m a huge Usher fan.

#7 – How he deals with the media. I’ve seen both good articles, bad articles and even some smut articles on him. Thing is, he doesn’t play to the media circus. He stands for the truth and generally the media focuses on the good things he’s done.

#6 – His message. He’s always telling people to go for their dreams, and to ahem, “never say never.”

#5 – His humility. Justin doesn’t try to steal the spotlight, it finds him. Most of the time he’s working, or doing nice stuff for people, like buying cars for best friends, or playing sports.

#4 – Stage Presence. You can’t deny that when he’s on stage, it’s kind of amazing. He really owns the stage like he belongs there.

#3 – Fan Nicknames. The first time I heard the term “Belieber” was on the radio and my first thought was “wow cool play on words.” I always love a good clever nickname. (I also like J. Lo for instance)

#2 – The Loyal Fans. You have to be the coolest person in the world if you have the biggest fan base in the world. It’s no secret that the fans got Justin to where he is. Usher did the grunt work, but it was all about the fans. If everyone was as passionate as Beiber fans about anything, what a great world this would be. Honestly, it’s hard to find enthusiasm like that anymore.

#1 – The Music. I had no idea who he was back in 2009 when everyone was squeeing over him, but I liked his music. I have a few of his songs on my ipod because I like the upbeat tempo and the smooth vocals. My favorite Bieber song is Somebody to Love.

Thanks for stopping by today, and um, hope you’re a true belieber too. I need to dedicate this post to Shelly, another true Belieber down south! (Haha, mostly because she told me this was a good idea.)

Namaste,
Rhi

WRITERS: Top 5 Most Memorable Scenes

Hey,

Lori over at Pure Imagination raised an interesting question today, one that I had been pondering last night myself. What makes a book magic?

There are books out there that I read that I fall in love with. What makes a book magic for me is the believeable factor. If I can believe that this story could really happen somewhere, that these characters really exist, then I’m in. I’ll be their biggest fan.

It got me thinking and almost panicking about my unpublished series, The Ferryman and The Flame. For the other aspiring writers out there this believeable factor, this magic factor is something we all try to achieve with our WiP’s.

There’s a way to know if you’ve succeeded.

Mundie Moms has been hosting a weekly special where they talk about their favorite scenes from City of Fallen Angels by Cassandra Clare.

That’s the ticket right there. Scenes so good that people have to read the book just for those scenes. If you read through a book and nothing sticks in your mind afterwards, scenes, liners, emotional reactions to the characters, then the book has failed. If however you find yourself going back to the same scenes over and over again and you end up naming scenes the “Dirty Sexy Alley Scene” or “The Seelie Court Scene” or “The Bookstore Scene” or “The Porch Scene” then you’ve got a framework for the book in your head. You might not remember everything but you’ll remember those scenes. THAT is what will make the book good, it’s all about the scenes!

This next part is an exercise for these aspiring writers and for myself I’ll post my answers right here.

Which scenes in your WiP are the most memorable? Why are they memorable?

If you can come up with 5 memorable scenes, scenes that people will find so irresistible they have to read the rest of the book, then kudos you win! If not, keep working at it!

The Ferryman and The Flame: Surrender
(my 5 most memorable scenes)

1. “Are you always like that?” : Krishani watches Kaliel swim with the merfolk. They meet for the first time afterwards and he creates an orb of ice for her.

2. “This is what I want.” : Krishani and Kaliel meet at the waterfall a second time, this time they kiss, but she runs away from him.

3. “Your destiny is greater than your love” : That horrible scene when Lady Atara tells Krishani that he has to leave Avristar and go to the Lands of Men.

4. “Ro Tulten Lye” : The dream Kaliel has where she dies with Lotesse, the Emerald Flame and finds out, he comes for us

5. “You were the last person I wanted to see before I died.” : Pux appears in the village where Kaliel is hiding. He’s wounded from battle and all he wants is one last moment with his best friend.

There are actually more I can think of and I could make another list for the WiP I’m currently editing.

The Ferryman and The Flame: Warrior

1. “She was everywhere and nowhere,” : Krishani watches the magma flow into the lake, thinking heavily about all the bad things that have happened.

2. “Ten thousand years” : Tulsen Tavesin tells Krishani what the Ferryman is expected to do. Krishani doesn’t want to be a Ferryman.

3. “I want to watch the blossoming,” : A dream sequence where Kaliel and Krishani end up in the orchards at Beltane where they watch the blossoming together.

4. “Tell him to come for me!” : Krishani threatens the Daed and dares Crestaos to come for him. The way he came for Kaliel.

5. “Kaliel?” : Krishani turns to see the body of the girl filled with the flame’s fire.

Post your comments here with either your top 5 scenes or with a link to where you posted them on your blog!

Namaste,
Rhi

WRITING: BETA Readers or REVIEWERS?

Thanks Leslie for making me think about this.

So many of you are getting it wrong.

I just want to point it out as an author AND a blogger (and a million other things) that if you’re an aspiring author that’s written a book and you want it out on Kindle and Nook and B&N and you’re not afraid of being self published and blah blah blah, that you need to be CAREFUL about how you treat the book bloggers.

1) Don’t be presumptuous. Yes we’re here to review books, but we all want GOOD books. None of us like posting negative reviews but we will if we have to.

2) Don’t ask before you’re really ready. You should be joining a writing group first like shewrites.com or writeoncon or somewhere, and talking to other aspiring writers about your work. You should be getting BETA readers first who can snuff out all the bad stuff. They can get you into the process of revising and editing BEFORE sending out your verbal diarrhea to Amazon and B&N (too graphic, really sorry)

3) Don’t expect a shining review unless you’re really confident that your work is the best it can be. I’ve often read books from authors that requested reviews only to find out that I need to give them an entire lesson on POV shifts, third person omniscent v.s. limited, adverbs, spelling errors and grammar, you name it, I always find SOMETHING wrong that I have to complain about. Usually these things are technical and while I can appreciate an “uncorrected proof” I need to know that beforehand. At least then I know whether or not to point these things out or not you know?

4) Do be kind in your approach. You attract more flies with honey than vinegar. Be authentic in your approach and give them YOUR best. That’s right, you know how you write QUERY letters to agents? Well send your QUERY letter to book bloggers. It’s your best bet of getting them interested and excited about your book without looking like a jackass or an amateur.

5) Gratitude. This is the last point and you REALLY need to be thankful to these people for taking you under their wing. You’re giving them content sure, but they’re giving you FREE EXPOSURE and that kind of thing only compounds, so you need to send them your love, tears, whatever, you need to make sure that THEY matter to you. So you answer their e-mails before anyone elses, you follow their blogs, you follow their tweets, you laugh about stuff not related to your book with THEM. And in turn they’ll become the beginning of your giant posse of fans.

That’s it, know whether or not you’re ready for BETA readers or REVIEWERS and for crying out loud be classy about the way you ask!

Namaste,

REVIEW: Discovery of Death by A.P. Fuchs

The Blurb: Zach and Rose had fallen in love during their sophomore year, their worlds completely changed and utterly belonging to each other’s. It was the first time either had fallen in love, deeply, purely. Aiming for a future together, plans were interrupted when Zach went missing for three long months, leaving Rose distraught, heartbroken and depressed.
Zach awakens in the dark of a coffin, his memory erased, his life and feelings for Rose forgotten. A strange group of people who identify themselves as his family reveal he has become a vampire, one of the undead, and is now a being with incredible power and a thirst for blood.

However, during Zach’s absence, Rose learns of her own secret heritage: she comes from a long line of vampire slayers, hellbent on eradicating the unholy threat of the undead from the face of the Earth. Now, not only does she need to try and get over the young man she loves, she must also come to terms with her new life and what that means for her future.

It is only when her path accidentally crosses with Zach’s does lost love begin to surface again.

The Short Stick: At least there was some kicking ass.

The Goods: The kicking ass and the location was awesome. I also have a thing about the name Cassie, but that has nothing to do with the vampire in the book. It was also a quick read, the story flowed and it was easy to get through. The end was probably the best part about the book, that and the ass kicking. Did I mention there’s some awesome ass kicking? Because there is and it should be mentioned.

The Not So Goods: I’ll admit I threw up a little in my mouth when Rose pulled out her decorated “Zach” box, done up in markers and had felt hearts glued to it. And I died a little when Rose mentioned that Zach had a “Rose” box, same style. Needless to say the romance is where the book needed work, Rose is a love sick puppy and even though Zach doesn’t remember her, what she remembers of him makes him look whipped. Also, even though the writing was good, it sometimes veered off, mostly in the dialogue when people were saying things pertinent to the story but using more of a narrator voice rather than their own character voice.

I also would have appreciated a lot more up close moments not of the cheese variety to make this one a home run for me. It just fell short in a lot of places.

Rating: 3/5

Recommendation: If you’ve had enough of vampires, then you don’t need to go here. On the other hand, if you just want to support Indie Authors, you should definitely pick this one up because it’s decent and isn’t going to make you invest too much in the vampire myth to get a good afternoon read.

Namaste,

WRITING: Noticing Small Press Publishing

Hey everyone,

You do realize that you don’t need to be self pubbed to be on Kindle right?

And you also don’t need to be with a big 6 to be published. Did you know that too?

Well if you didn’t, here are some publishing companies that are NOT affiliated with the big 6.

Angry Robot

Black Zombie Publishing

Coscom Entertainment

Dark Side Publishing

Entangled Pub

Llewellyn’s (Flux)

Quirk Books

Revolution Publishing

Rhemalda Publishing

Samhain Publishing

Spencer Hill Press

Sterling Publishing

Tor

And I’m sure there’s more I’m missing, but the thing is, 50% of people don’t care who published the book, they care that the book is good. Publishers are irrelevant.

And yes, some of these companies take unsolicited manuscripts, some of them are closed for submissions, some of them take only solicited manuscripts, etc. etc. Some of them get books into bookstores, some of them do POD, some of them do ebooks only, but all of them publish books, all of them get the books into the market, and all of them are there to help authors get their stories out there.

What more could you really ask for?

Namaste,

REVIEW: Blood Red Rod by Moira Young

The Blurb: Saba has spent her whole life in Silverlake, a dried-up wasteland ravaged by constant sandstorms. The Wrecker civilization has long been destroyed, leaving only landfills for Saba and her family to scavenge from. That’s fine by her, as long as her beloved twin brother Lugh is around. But when a monster sandstorm arrives, along with four cloaked horsemen, Saba’s world is shattered. Lugh is captured, and Saba embarks on an epic quest to get him back.

Suddenly thrown into the lawless, ugly reality of the world outside of desolate Silverlake, Saba is lost without Lugh to guide her. So perhaps the most surprising thing of all is what Saba learns about herself: she’s a fierce fighter, an unbeatable survivor, and a cunning opponent. And she has the power to take down a corrupt society from the inside. Teamed up with a handsome daredevil named Jack and a gang of girl revolutionaries called the Free Hawks, Saba stages a showdown that will change the course of her own civilization.

The Short Stick: Gritty, brutal and full of passion.

The Goods: The grit was the best thing about this book. It worked its way into you and made me forget to use ings when talking to my kids for awhile. Excuse me while I act like a hick for a bit. The language that Moira used in her book was really effective, and the funny thing is, she didn’t write it that way to begin with. I’m almost certain that Moira chose which words to spell wrong and did it on purpose. You can do that on MS Word, hit CTRL F and find a word and change it. I’m almost certain that the writing style came later, with respect to maybe the “an” and the “yer” and other articles. There were these beautiful instances of prose inbetween all the “bad grammar” so don’t get the idea that this book isn’t “well written” because of the styling, the styling is actually brilliant.

The plot was exciting, my favorite line being “Yer timin sucks.” and then the relationship between Jack and Saba. Really, I have to look at this as a stylistic piece, Saba, the Angel of Death is what makes this different. The actual plot points are all fairly typical, but enjoyable indeed because of Saba’s interpretatin of it. This book is character driven, not plot driven and so you have to give her props for that.

Jack was by far my favorite character, my favorite moment for him was the waterfall moment, man, that guy tried so hard! I loved it!

The Not So Goods: The publishers really gave this one a big push it didn’t deserve over other books. Sure it’s a good book but it’s no Hunger Games. When I went to Chapters there had to be 30 of this book on the shelves, and then Imaginary Girls by Nova Ren Suma, they stocked 2. So really, I loved Imaginary Girls more than Blood Red Road, but I don’t believe that one book should be favored over another in the market, let the fans decide on that, not the publishers and the bookstores. More copies can always be ordered later.

Getting back to the book itself, my only gripe is the explanation of the modern world. Moira runs the risk of being more of an epic fantasy (gasp!) because even if these places are described in English, we still have no idea of where the modern world falls, nor do we have a lot of evidence of it being around. We know this is Earth, we know there used to be Wreckers, but I couldn’t tell you if this was the middle east or the united states or siberia for that matter. That had me a little confused, and I realize that because the story is from Saba’s POV that we can lose that but I still believe it should have been explained somehow to her.

Rating: 5/5 (it really was that good even without the explanations and the unfair publisher push)

Recommendation: Go pick this one up! It deserves a spot on your TBR pile.

Namaste,

WRITING: Hook, Line and Sinker

WARNING: If you don’t like happy dances, stop reading now.

I had an epiphany the other night. I was going through my Kindle, Kobo and PDF reader on my iphone, flipping between books thinking hmm, what do I want to read now?

And then I had a really bad idea. I had sent the first draft of FLAME OF THE APOCALYPSE to my Beta Reader who has read the first two books. I realized that technically I can download it so it’s on my phone. All I had to do was go to my inbox, click on the sent folder, and then scroll through a few hundred messages to find the e-mail I sent her two weeks ago.

Sure enough I find it, download it and open it up into my PDF reader.

I start reading . . .

AND I DON’T STOP.

I can’t stop, for some reason I’m completely sucked into the book, it’s got this crazy hold on me, the gait of the words, the flow of the sentences, the pretty words I use, the emotions and feelings of the characters . . .

It really didn’t feel like MY book.

I kept reminding myself, “this is the FIRST DRAFT.”

Usually what used to happen when I’d open up FLAME OF SURRENDER or its little brother FLAME OF JUSTICE, I’d read through the prologue which was usually free of grammar and spelling errors, and then get into the first paragraph of the first chapter and STOP. I’d find some minuscule spelling error or a sentence that’s out of place or I’m not feeling it or something.

NOT. THIS. TIME.

I only read through the first chapter and then forced myself to stop. My husband actually came into the room and was like, “Are we watching Fringe tonight or what?” and so I put the phone down, just because of him.

I tried to stay away from it too, I was like, “Oh no, I’m actually spoiling myself by reading this, the second book has A LOT of work to do.”

But then I was bored in the car and didn’t feel like reading anyone else’s book for once so I was back again. Got through the second chapter.

GOT. THE. SAME. FEELING.

I don’t know what the heck it is with this book, but there’s something different about it.

And there were plenty of things I did differently while writing the first draft.

1. I wrote in first person limited from the get go. I was inside only one character’s head at a time, I even planned it out in my outline by putting their initials next to the scene that was from their POV.

2. I expanded my vocabulary. I used a lot of simple words that I didn’t know about before, there are plenty of 4 and 5 letter words that are both different, non Shakespearean and interesting. I did my best to include these words when writing. Expanding your vocabulary doesn’t mean learn bigger words, it means learn all the small words you don’t know exist yet. Just FYI for others out there that still find themselves sauntering . . . y’all could be parrying or tarrying or you could have an awkward gait. Think of it like scrabble when you play against the computer and they get like 33 points from playing Xi.

3. I wrote it all in one period of time. I was there everyday with it, and because of that I was able to keep the same language, tone and style. Best thing to do is if you begin writing it, don’t stop until it’s finished.

I’m dreading going through the editing process on the second book, but what will steer me on is the fact that the third book is so worry free.

What about you? When did your writing hook you?

Namaste,

REVIEW: The Tower of Parlen Min by Matt Xell

The Blurb: Ves Asirin, an orphaned and introverted boy with a complicated memory loss disorder, wins a trip to the TOWER OF PARLEN MIN, the home of the wealthiest inventor of the time, Jacobius Trent. There, with 19 other children, he must compete in the Sword Challenge; a series of intricate puzzles and daring tasks, for a prize of $12 million. As dazzling, glorious and liberating as the Tower seems to be for him, Ves finds that it keeps a dark and secret history that he has been unknowingly connected to for over 150 years, a secret that will define his future and destiny … if he can escape The shadow; a powerful and seemingly unstoppable, supernatural serial killer.

The Short Stick: An adventure that will leave you wanting for more!

The Goods: Okay there were a lot of good things about this book, the characters for one were all believable, the plot was action packed and jumping, I was always finding myself surprised by the intricate and creative things Matt Xell has the characters get involved with. In some cases I could think of the Tower of Parlen Min as kind of like Hogwartz, without all the classes. It really reminded me a lot of the Philosopher’s Stone, when Harry had to explore parts of Hogwartz to find the Stone. In this case, the children are exploring the Tower for a sword. They have to solve clues and complete challenges, which at first I thought would be benign until they got really violent! I actually enjoyed the violence, it made the risks more real for me. And then add the wolves in the woods and the cabin and the serial killer on the loose and the surprise ending, I mean how Ves got out of there alive at all is a miracle. There was a lot stacked against him.

The Not So Goods: I wish the writing was better. I won’t lie, at first the voice comes off very non fiction and technical, like reading national geographic, and then it gets wonky. There are too many points of view, and they all converge in the same scenes, I was never sure who was telling the story as there’s no known narrator and so for me, I’d say even though WHAT happens, and HOW it happens is fantastic, HOW Xell tells the story is BLECH. I’d look at a complete rewrite. If it were me, I’d take it from Ves’s perspective, and then Vikey and maybe one other person like Mr. Cromwell or something. There are A LOT of characters to get to know in the book and so I often found myself confused by the names and who was doing what, etc. etc. I got the gist of it, but again, this could have been pulled off much better if the writing was better. Lastly, I don’t really know who Ves is as a character. His personality changes and because of his memory loss I don’t think HE knows who he is so he has random bursts of personality and I found it REALLY jarring because one minute he’s this confused kid, and the next he’s all “Sure I’ll kill that giant frog monster for you!” and then he’s got skills he doesn’t know he has and blah blah blah, it just made me feel no connection to Ves whatsoever. Oh and the last thing, he told me this book was YA and it’s MG, Ves is 11, so he’s nowhere near being considered for the YA market. If he rewrote it as an MG I’m almost certain he’d get picked up, he’d just have to tone down the violence a bit, and obviously clean up the point of view, and nail down Ves’s character and it would seriously be flying off shelves!

Rating: 5/5 on the storyline 1/5 on the writing.

Recommendation: I hope Matt Xell will take this one back into the drawing room. He’s got a book that could be BIG, but he really needs to look at his writing again.

Namaste,

REVIEW: Darwin’s Children by Natasha Larry

The Blurb: Life can get pretty complicated for any seventeen-year-old girl, but for a home-schooled telepathic girl trying to survive in a prestigious private school in small-town Jonesborough, Tennessee, it can be maddening – especially when her telepathic father keeps eavesdropping on her thoughts!

Jaycie Lerner’s family isn’t the usual mom-dad-kid setup. Her family’s special – in more ways that one. Her mom’s MIA, but Allison, her personal live-in ‘trainer,’ is more than a mom, with her own special abilities, like being able to lift cars and run incredibly fast. And her godfather John can literally convince anyone to do anything.

But, as far as the rest of the world’s concerned, Jaycie’s on the outside looking in. The townsfolk love her pediatrician father, but she doesn’t fit in with ‘normal’ kids, and she doesn’t really want to. Most of her free time is spent training to keep her telekinetic and telepathic powers under control. But there’s one thing she can’t control – her feelings, especially when her best friend Matt is nearby. If only he knew what she was truly capable of…

Everything seems to be status quo for Jaycie and her family, until she receives a cryptic message from a stranger and meets a very unusual girl new to Jonesborough. Then all hell breaks loose!

The Short Stick: If Will and Willow Smith ever did a movie together . . . this would be it.

The Goods: Okay, the characters are really strong, the writing was decent and the plot was exciting and kept moving pretty quickly. I found it interesting both because I am a psychic and because I read minds to the same level John can read minds. Some of the tricks of the trade that Ms. Larry has described here are things that actually happen to me on a regular basis. It makes me wonder sometimes why more people can’t do it for real since they seem to be able to write about it accurately. That was a nice surprise, all the accuracy with the metaphysics and such. Also, I got the Will Smith and Willow Smith idea from the motorcycle, I mean really, a motorcycle!? Ugh, there was some stuff about this book that was way too cool for words.

The Not So Goods: There were two things I didn’t like about this book, the first being the cover, yuck. The second was POV shifts, I get really stuck up when a book has a lot of POV’s and they keep flipping back and forth between people and not smoothly. This book does this a lot, and so just you might have to reread some things to get who’s head we’re in and then with all of the mind reading going on, sometimes we’re in John’s perspective, but he’s reading Mason’s mind or Haylee’s mind and then we’re like oh, what’s going on? I found myself getting a little lost in places. I found myself again and picked right back up because the story itself is great, it was just that one little pet peeve of mine.

Rating: 4/5

Recommendation: Go pick this one up if you get a chance, it’s a good read!

Source: Thanks to Natasha Larry for e-mailing me and putting the book in my hands. I hope my turn around time for the review was quick enough for ya!

Namaste,